Outlining Pt. 2

        Like I said in my previous post, Hayden and I would go over potential issues of our initial story outline, and as we did that, we began to develop a new story line using the issues we found, and made it an improved one. Here it is:

        The film starts out with a flashback to a couple of days ago of a high school student practicing a sport. While he's practicing, the student gets injured, and the flashback ends. The next part shows the kid watching T.V., with the T.V. being on a sports channel. The sound from the T.V. is tuned out though, as at the moment the kid is narrating, with the sound being non-diegetic. He's narrating about his injury as he's watching, explaining the injury and how severe it is, saying that it will be a while before he plays again. Then the sports show's sound comes back on the T.V. as the narrator stops speaking. Ironically, the sports broadcasters are speaking about a high school athlete's injury. The broadcasters are speaking about how good the athlete has been, speaking of the awards and scholarship offers the athlete has gotten throughout his short, yet illustrious career. As the broadcaster continue to speak about the athlete, the same flashback that came in the beginning comes back to the student's head, and after the flashback finishes, the camera shows some of his medals, trophies, and scholarship offers sitting in his home, then shows the injury he suffered as he continues to watch T.V., implying that he's the big-time athlete that got injured.

        So, same idea, just a different way of presenting it. It looks like a lot more from the description, but actually, it's less film, just more details being illustrated in each clip. The real issue was time, as 2 minutes of film isn't a lot, especially for a pair trying to generate a story start-up. As anybody who read the previous post may realize, we took out the whole scene including the radio broadcast, as we felt that it would take too much time, and we felt that it wasn't necessary in order to convey our desired idea. We feel that this amount of film will translate to 2 minutes, more or less.

        As was also stated before, I said I wouldn't post the outline of our film opening until it was completed, and now that it's done, here it is. The parts that are crossed out were part of the initial outline, but we used pencil to shade over it in order to keep the ideas there, just in case we wanted to look back at them. What isn't crossed out is what we plan on using for the film.